The music can be...
sweet and soft,
loud and angry,
powerful and moving,
dull and pointless,
repetitive and boring,
clever and perfect,
uplifting and happy,
depressing and sad,
relative and understandable,
silly and pathetic,
strange and warped,
beautiful and enlightening,
the best thing one will ever hear.
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This was pretty good. I know music is really hard to try and capture in words, and this is one just way of writing about it. It's okay by itself, and I'm not sure what else you could add to it. Maybe just leave it, and let people get the gist of what you're trying to say, and fill the rest in with their thoughts and memories? Just a possibility. Sorry this wasn't much help.
Agreed. Just a list of words. You could make this into something, but right now...eh.
Sorry, but i agree with tgirly. Also you did something that i do to, put comma's at the end of each line. It didnt have a very good flow though. I liked the words but it didnt really draw me in or give me a rhythm. Good work and keep it up, keep practicing and im sure your future things will be amazing
Black Ink x.
I feel like the poem didn't really have any flow, and was just a long list of words. Wow, that sounds harsher than I meant it to. They're very good words, but that doesn't make it a poem. You could write a little stanza about each line, about how a poem can be sweet and soft, like a butterfly or something. (Don't put butterfly, that's a poor example.) I do like your word choices, though. Sorry I was so harsh, it's probably me, not the poem.