tgirly

I like this, it has excellent imagery and an awesome theme. I love it. It sent a chilled my spine. I agree with everyone else. I don't really have any ...

I feel like the first stanza doesn't really have the same word choice as the rest. I feel there could be more unity. Other than that, I do like the ...

I've never heard the original, but I like this a lot. I have a sweet tooth, and love the referances to candy. It's a very nice poem, I love it. ...

I like it. My favorite stanza is probably the last. It has a different flow than the other lines, but that's okay, because it adds more emphasis on it. I ...

I love it! My only critique is that I think you meant for "For Everything" in Creature's letter to be italicized like the rest of it. Other than that, there's ...

I think it would have more flow if you changed "Is where you can be found" to "Is where you'll be found." Also, I feel like in the fourth line, ...

I like it, it has a very real feeling that you don't find in many poems. I can really see your personality in your writing, which is a good thing. ...

I like this poem. I like how it makes you feel like so much is happening, but at the same time like so little is happening. My one critique would ...

I wanted more. If there isn't a limit, I'd make it longer, if I were you. I like it lot, but I'm not sure if the first stanza describes confusion ...

I like it. My only problem is that the flow seems a little erratic in parts, I feel like the "a" at the end of the line is kinda isolated. ...

You have a few words that rhyme in the poem, which is a little distracting. I like the poem, and what you're saying. It makes complete sense, and I could ...

I take back what I said in the prologue about the tone being monotonous. I don't know what I was thinking! I usually don't read something this long online, but ...

I liked it a lot, and I will probably go on to read the next chapter. However, there were a few things wrong with it. First, there were a few ...

I like it. It's really deep. I like the last line the best, "And I get the grand old feeling of surprise." It's like you did all this expecting so ...

I only found one grammer mistake, so kudos to you! In the last line, a should be an. Not that big of a deal, but it was slightly distracting. I ...