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I wanted more. If there isn't a limit, I'd make it longer, if I were you. I like it lot, but I'm not sure if the first stanza describes confusion as well as the others. I really like the others. You have great metaphors and voice. It was confusion, but then I felt it was more specific than that, like it was a certain type of confusion if that makes sense? I felt it was a more subdued confusion, instead of a panicky confusion, if that makes sense. Usually when we think about confusion, we think about the latter and not the former like your poem did which makes it unique. I thought you did a really good job describing the former. Good job.
Hope this helps.
-tgirly
Here's my review.
I would say that the first two paragraphs do reflect the feeling of confusion.
But when you say
It seems to reflect a feeling of helplessnesss (That's only what I think. I'm sure everybody will have a different point of view) It's all about how much you're able to make the reader understand and interpret the feeling described here.
Here, when you use the word 'choices', it makes me think that there is a confusion in chosing something. (Good choice of words here.)
That's all I can say. Keep on writing!