tacoguy1988

The prologue doesn't feel like the prologue. Its feels like the beginning of the story. It doesn't describe the world or the Elven Kingdom. Is Annon a forest elf? And ...

You have a lot of her observations. It would be interesting to know how Ariel feels as a vampire. And how did Ariel's body reacting differently from a human? Or ...

There is no action or adventure yet. Dramatic sure, but no action or adventure. In order to really have action you need reaction too. All you have is people submitting. ...

Interesting, its like something that would be in the Torment series. I like how the writing refers to the reader. I haven't seen a story that has done that yet ...

You love is so sweet. You have a lot of imagery of what people commonly think of when it comes to young romance. My favorite part is the memories and ...

Wow I just saw a religious song posted. Very powerful. I really needed something like this. I asked someone to pray for me. Do you mind if you do it ...

Very beautiful. I can see people singing this song at church. Maybe it was a sign that I saw this right now. I am really trying to distract myself right ...

I really want to know if Claire really saw Dmitri or if there is really nothing there. I am also wondering about why Kaya was sent there. Releasing only one ...

No I did not predict you were going to try to be unpredictable. I thought you were just doing a serious examination of predictability. Not that you doing that made ...

Sorry but "ambiguous ball game called life" is so cliche. I liked the rest of the poem. I don't normally read poetry and how I read things is normally totally ...