sylviaelioness

Beautiful. I love the interlaced doubt in the poem. Because when people write in a diary, they really are writing to themselves, aren't they? They really are basically giving themselves ...

Hi! While reviewing you story, I couldn't really get all I wanted to say by just writing a huge long paragraph. So, my comments are the words between the dashes ...

Wow. That was thrillingly horrific. Yet it's pretty realistic too. There's a few punctuation and grammar mistakes, but nothing major. The first paragraph really drew me in. The simplicity in ...

It is romantic: in a dark sort of way. The passion of true love is definitely there, though. So, the good or bad first? Okay, bad first... When you switch ...

This story does a really nice twist on the unicorn idea. The whole religious aspect of the unicorns? And what's ironic is that a lot of people as the same ...

This is completely out of the norm. Maybe you did it on purpose, maybe you didn't. Either way, it was amazing. I am a real dialogue-writer myself. Even then though, ...

That was a great poem. The metaphors and associations really make the feeling of being lost apparent. You don't want to see or know anything... you just want to get ...

Hmm... This seems like a story in the making--a rough draft. You do quite well explaining the emotions of River, but you need to work on the description of the ...

I loved it. I was expecting it to be a bit more scary. He seems to get out of the "cuffs" rather quickly, but it was a great story anyway. ...

This is a great story. There are a number of minor grammatical mistakes, but nothing too major. The plot is suspenseful, the characters are very realistic, the description is great... ...

This sounds like its coming from a very depressed teenager. She just wants to leave this world... die... commit suicide, something as long as it gets her out of her ...

This is certainly got a lot of potential. The description is phenomenal. The fear is emminent through out. It had me nervous and ready to jump out of my seat ...

This poem seems to focus on the evils of the world, once you've seen what it's really like. The lack of love, the hate, the death, the shackles of rules... ...

That was splendid. There is the famous saying that eyes are the windows to a person's soul. And that's what your character is doing. He's looking into the eyes of ...

This is a great story. It's kind of like listening to a therapy session. Haha. It seems as if Marie needs to find who she is as her own individual. ...