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starrgazer

  • Short Story » Culture, Narrative Re: the dust and the seep of the city

    Okay first thought is that you may want to space out your paragraphs more because after one look, it seems really intimidating and people may be reluctant to read it. ...

    Mar 18, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: so, it's true

    Contrary to what other people said, After a paragraph, I kind of got the flow of it and the lack of " was just fine for me. Cool font by ...

    Mar 18, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Fantasy Re: Insanely Mad

    Hey I get that this is unfinished, but it'll be great if you post the whole finished chapter. If its not done, just type it out on a document and ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: The Execution

    Okay a few things before the actual critism: 1) When I read the end and found out it was her father, I was like O.O What the hell?! So good ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Romantic Re: Immortalis

    Some parts of this really did touch me and that's saying something for a romance fanatic. Not sure how to quote yet, but my favourite parts are: "Tears came then ...

    Mar 16, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic Re: By The River

    This is such a sweet poem and honestly like a breath of fresh air. Theres a lot of deep and emotional poems out here/there and its nice to have something ...

    Mar 12, 2012
  • Other » Humor, Humor Re: Annoying Qualities of Boys

    Ha ha, this made my day. Contrary to what gimlirules said, in my (a girl's) perspective, this is humorous and light hearted with a bit of truth snuck into it ...

    Mar 11, 2012
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Teen Fiction Re: Nameless

    *eyebrows quirked up* This certainly took me on a hell of a ride :P From the dog poo to the hospital and then to finding out more about her past ...

    Mar 11, 2012
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Waves of Words

    This is a really nice poem that me a sweet serene feel to it. I love your word choice (e.g. amber, swatches and balmy :)) and the imagery you paint ...

    Mar 11, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Lyrical Re: The skeleton of a dove.

    First of all, I have to say I simply fell in love with this title :) I don't know why by "skeleton of a dove" just seemed so....eerily bewitching yet ...

    Mar 10, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Romantic Re: The Boy Chapter 1

    This is a sweet read and easy to follow. I don't have any critism towards your grammar or anything like that so good job. The small description of the boy ...

    Mar 10, 2012
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Verbum

    The way this story starts with a small thought and then grows into more complex ideas is wonderful. When I read it for the second time, I realized that this ...

    Mar 10, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Tower

    I like the whole message this gives like a person who has a brick of gold thats been hollowed out inside. My favourite lines are: "People say the best time ...

    Mar 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Fake Identity

    Wow, this pretty much sums up all the emotions I can't seem to label whenever I'm feeling depressed or bitter because of someone. This poem is like a swirl of ...

    Mar 9, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Other Re: Thoughtless

    First of all, I just have to ask, is the name 'Katashi' inspired by Kakashi or was that just me? Everytime I read the name I had the mental image ...

    Feb 10, 2012


Of those who say nothing, few are silent.
— Thomas Neill