sokool15

Welcome to the site! Lol, I thought it was amusing, although kind of sloppy. I agree with what Claud said, but again, I was amused. If your purpose was to ...

LIked this! Just came from critting your chapter one. Stupid me...I always read the sequel before the original. :P OKay, good. I don't agree about the added intrigue and interest ...

PO-TA-TOES! lol. Hem hem...*clears throat and folds hands in business-like manner.* First of all, I liked your story. It doesn't have too much of a plot in this chapter, but ...

o. m. g. Chills run up and down my spine. Great story! Seriously beautiful, enchanting. Not exactly sure why it's in the romantic forum, but I guess it could be ...

Okay, I could crit the rest of your stories, but since I've already read the whole thing, I don't think I will. This is my last crit for this story. ...

Okay, I agree with all the Pirate Lady said, and have some things to add... Your spacing of the paragraphs. You need to put an empty line in between each ...

Yes, I liked this one! How could Kizel say stuff about being friends when he's so cruel? Well, at least Khor's not being tortured. And I think you should know, ...

Good job! I like it how Khor can manipulate...yeah. I find myself at a loss for appropriate expressions to display the feelings I have for your work. I leave you ...

Er...wow. You seem to favor the coughing up of blood as a suitable punishment for any past unknown wrongs ALL of your characters have every done. Hmm... I'm already past ...

Sweeeeet chapter! Good job...um, do you still want me to crit here, even though you gave me the whole thing? I'm reading it now, and I could keep critting here ...

Haha!!! LOVE IT! Great once again. I hope you get lots of good reviews on this, because it deserves it. You need to keep posting this, soon! It's nice when ...

Oooooh! Good one! Trapped in one's own mind...now that is a concept I can understand. Time travel is hard, mind stuff is easy. Okay, good chapter overall. A few typos ...

you really name your nails? Anyway, this was a really good piece, and Claudette caught the typo. Besides, how could I , who am not worthy to lick the tip ...

After what seemed like several hours of cold and darkness Knall’s hand slipped away from the wall and the wall peeled away . He stood there in the dark, wondering ...

Good! the only thing that was bad was the fight at the beginning. You have him coughing up blood. Whoa. It takes some serious injury, pneumonia or...something bad to have ...