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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Werething - Chapter 10

    Hey! Smanske15 here to review! Note: These critiques are constructive criticism only. They are not meant to be mean or hurtful, only helpful. Take these with a grain of salt. ...

    Dec 8, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Book--- Chapter 1

    Smanske15 here to review! Note: These nit-picks are constructive criticism only. In no way are they meant to be hurtful or degrading. Take them with a grain of salt. Overall, ...

    Dec 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Rebel

    Hey! I, personally, am not a huge fan of the abstract. That being said, I did really like your piece. I think it had a nice flow and rhythm to ...

    Nov 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Beyond thy False Faces

    Hey! Smanske15 here to review! A few quick comments. Keep in mind, please, that these are merely suggestions and I in no way intend to influence your art. Stay creative! ...

    Nov 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: You...

    Hey! Smanske15 here to review! First off, these are merely suggestions, and I in no way expect you to use them, but they're here if you want. Here are the ...

    Nov 26, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Wake up now.

    Hey! I really liked your poem. It's really fun to read when there's an actual story beneath the poem, you know? I wasn't expecting it to turn so dark, but ...

    Jul 29, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Narrative Re: I love you, but I am not in love with you.

    Hey!! I liked your poem. It describes something that should be simple, but is so complicated that we don't even know what to call it when we feel it. I ...

    Jul 27, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Other Re: Prologue

    Hey! First off, I am very impressed. You included many elements that I liked, and many others that made me want to read more. My first complaint is that you ...

    Jul 26, 2014
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: An in innocent game of spin the bottle

    Hey! I LOVED it. You're definitely not afraid to break the third wall, which is also something I tend to do when writing in first person. You had a couple ...

    Jul 25, 2014
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: There She Sat

    Hey! First off, nice. The storyline was spot on. I do want to warn you that there are a few grammatical errors, but I hate it when people point mine ...

    Jul 25, 2014
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Another World

    Hey! Upon the first look, I noticed a few grammatical errors, but I won't comment on them specifically because I hate when people do that to me. I just wanted ...

    Jul 24, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Hey Sally

    Hey! My favorite line was the last two: "I knew you only once and thought of you today." I thought it was beautifully phrased, and elegant in the way of ...

    Jul 24, 2014
  • Poetry » Science Fiction, Satire Re: Why Aliens Haven't Invaded Earth

    Hey! I like the twist on a modern idea. It was a little deranged, but since it's from the alien's perspective I'll accept it. You wrote your poem in standard ...

    Jul 24, 2014
  • Script » Realistic, Narrative Re: Prologue to untitled work that may/may not be continued

    Hey! Smanske15 here I liked the storyline. I think that you could have gone more into the story, because I was left with questions such as what happened after Freddie ...

    Jul 24, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Kill Me Please

    This poem is utterly beautiful. Honestly, most poems I read that spell something down the side, for lack of a better word, suck. But this one you had clearly put ...

    May 5, 2014


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