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Love it. The rhyme isn't the best for the second stanza, you might want to go with more disverse rhymes. It'll help break the sameness. Loved it after finishing. Very ...

So good.

Thank you! =]

Such a good poem. It captures the sense of I'm in pain with the youthful I'm fine. It works so well. I'd cut out the part about the salon treatment. ...

that last line is shocking. meter is grand here, and is broken in a similarly thought way so it works. The first three lines are awesome, they need to be ...

Incredible. The angst. Lovely. You should complete the poem with a translation into something else. But for what it is: This is a angsty poem that works well for being ...

Trolololol long review.

Gets a magnifying glass. Tiny? Where? Looks up... oh, this MOUNTAIN.

Incredible angst sex bitterness. Love it. You poem worked in maining theme throughout and did a good job of describing your mood and style. Your use of extended metaphor is ...

So dark. Quite nice.

Characters please. Names!

I'm a fan of the perfect crime. Who wants all that life? Love your poetry. Your message is sound. If you want to be more intense work on more narrative ...

Had something to say.

Hits like adrenaline depression.

Very nice. I too don't want to live truly without risk but there is a limit. Try not repeating the word risk so much, it really jarrs the flow of ...