silented1

That sucks so much. Best wishes.

A plus.

Troll.

Try to meld the idea in the last stanza throughout the poem. You did well to keep the idea throughout. Also, I love your name. EtherealGarbage. Greatness.

"because friendship is everlasting" I'd remove this line, it lessens the impact of previous lines. The following 3 lines also remove power. The sun watching her is a good line.

Loved manic pixie dream girl. More lines like that please.

This was sad. I liked the parts about the depression and sadness more than the parts about the love affair. Good poetry. Thank you for posting.

In the 3rd stanza you depart from the idea of the poem, something like the power of God. But in the 4th stanza you continue more about the person's life, ...

Your repetition works because you used complete thoughts for each line, well done.

Like at the end he said is it wrong to love a girl that doesn't exist. Basically, I am saying search for some deep truth and put that in your ...

This poem is asking a deeper question that I think you should outright say. Read mijn liefde on the most liked works on the front page.

You don't come across as rude. Thank you.

It's psychology. From lightyears away is how you wanted it to be, not how the poem should be. It matches in the sense that it continues the thought, not the ...

I have no clue how to review this.