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Found this one in my archives... You caught me! I’m thinking again. Go ahead, prosecute my emotions. This is pretty vague description, not much I can really get out of ...

This island is a prison; a trick has led me here. The gates around the entrance Are they closed...? and the fences with electric zap taunt us; a reminder that ...

I decorated the window With shooting stars. I like this I covered it with glitter To make the time pass. I like this too I wrote some song lyrics This ...

Suddenly I'm feeling the blame, Of? How should I relate to this? Can I relate to this? all I see is the blood all over my hands. Now I understand ...

poets don't really have a point: So why should I continue to read if it's pointless? like candles sitting in dark standing only as a reminder of what could be ...

The beautiful girl Immediate tell over show. with the white-blonde hair, the one in the black bikini: Oh, so now it's a different girl? she works for a corrupt man. ...

First off, your rhyme, it did feel a bit forced. You may want to work on it. Which means keep rhyming until it works naturally. But are you sure for ...

and I try to clear my mind. So much raw emotion I felt, that I feel I’ve lost. you may want to give us some better imagery, like similes or ...

Okay, so the rhyme wasn't too forced, which is good. Except for the last line. We don't really see too much action to this, like the description of the story ...

Let me go back. To my sun-soaked childhood. To tears, my fears and despair. .> Where did it go? I miss it. Take me back to the time where the ...

What's happening here? We don't really know. The best thinng I could come up with an alien abduction.. >.> "I can still see you" Why couldn't you see them? "Nothing ...

I'm going to start with what I find easiest first. I'm melting in your onyx black lipstick smeared across my The line break there is a bit bad, if you ...

This all pretty choppy for me. If that the effect you were looking for, good job, if not you may want to fix it. Mostly I had trouble following from ...

Disclaimers suck. =p Welcome to poetry, if you plan to keep on writing. Also, welcome back. Okay, so to that first part. School, Second and Third languages, getting in my ...

Fire scorched and fire singed Singed? Is that a word? Was watched but one That wished upon a star That's a bit awkward. You may want to say something like ...