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It's Joel, comming at cha with a review. Also... hi. I like the flipped perspectives. Why is there no bolded phrase in the first stanza. Why is the last adjective ...

I like how this is done. Except, maybe a bigger line break between Im, all, and... I think you get what I'm talking about. There's some grammatical issues in here. ...

I am happy you both are proud of you work, because you should be, because it's a good poem. Favorite thing: "click, clack." Positives: 1) I like-a da metaphor, bruh. ...

I'm reviewing as I read, so if this is long, you wrote either a lot of things I like, a lot of things I didn't like, and if it's really ...

That clay imagery, right at the start, that's gold! "From what you are / from what we did," rhythmic flare, and a good follow up from previous lines. "You ruined ...

I very much enjoy greek mythology, and this take on it was a good read. My favorite about this was just enough use of imagery. Kid seeing the storm for ...

Who/what is this main character? I have to say, the description made me not give this review too much effort. There wasn't too much that I noticed that struck out ...

This review is being written as the story is being read, and I'm just writing everything that I critique down. I like this immediately off the bat, how you portrayed ...

I also like how it's a letter. This rant is very, very ironic. "I don't hate you, but I wish I did," is contradictory. "I don't wish ill upon you," ...

There's a couple grammatical issues here. I like the specification on what kind of plate. This helped me connect with the piece a lot, though I don't like 'long-forgotten' because ...

There's a couple punctuation errors, but that's not really a big deal. I like how the poem itself feels empty. Although, it is a very creative take, it does make ...

The only issue I really have is the lack of setting. Where are they? You don't need to say who the man is, but giving some detail of his appearance ...

To start, I like, “molecule of thread” being struck out. It’s a literal image of the rope being mentioned. (stanza 1) Is it bad said person is lassoing the sun? ...

I like how the amount of syllables slowly fade as the narrator gets emotionally colder. (stanza 1) There’s still some grammatical issues here. The first line doesn’t fit the tense ...

I appreciate the name itself being aesthetically poetic. “That initiative is the thing I lack the most.” (stanza 1) This is confusing because I can’t tell if the sentence is ...