A Passive Aggressive Thank You Note

Hello! Murphy here for a review and to return the favor.

First of let me just say how much I love this. It really hits home for me because of a great majority of people in my life who came and went. The wording in this poem is spectacular! The way it seems like a nice letter and then slowly reveals the truth of how you felt. I wish I could be that smooth. The ending was so well done. the amount of feeling put into this piece makes it relatable. I think the fact that even though this person hurt you so deeply, you are still able to wish them even a little bit of happiness speaks highly of your wisdom and maturity.

Thanks for the read. I can't find anything to critique. I hope you have a wonderful day

Thanks for sharing. Wow! This is one of the most powerful recriminatory prose poems I have ever read. The hurt is palpable. I like the way the the poem starts via seemingly being friendly and then revealing the sarcastic nature of the comments. It reminded me of persons who taught me how NOT to behave. Great lessons can be learned via those negative examples but unfortunately the pain remains. The poem also made me wonder exactly what the old fellow did besides leaving. How exactly was he selfish? What exactly motivated him to leave? Knowing that would have endowed the bitter statements with more emotional force. Nevertheless the poem is certainly a beautiful composition.

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....thank you note to you[.]

....,that isn't what I do[.]

....without saying goodbye[,]

....someone to teach me[,]

To lead me[,]

What were you thinking, exactly

When you left on that plane[?]

passive[-]aggressive

....that isn't what I do[.]

I think is a really good poem, I'm pretty sure that I would write this to an enemy of mine, and I would use really crude words in it, but I find that this expresses my feelings greatly, cause I had a teacher that had left on the very last day of school, telling the class that she wouldn't be coming back for another year there. I think this relates to my thoughts accurately.

Hi! Space here for a review! ^^

This poem caught my eye because of the name. It works so well with the story and, to me, draws the reader in wondering..'what happened?'.
The format is also something I love. It fits the poem perfectly.

A few lines I enjoyed were "I do not hate you, but I wish I did, so this could be easier", "I am angry, I am torn up, I wish you were here" and "leaving me without someone to teach me". We can obviously see that the protagonist loves this person, looking up to them as a friend and idol, to teach lessons and guide them through life. When this adored person leaves, you/the protagonist feels heartbroken and betrayed, wishing they could hate this person for leaving them, but also knowing that they still love them.

Overall, I read this poem and think of a person who misses and loved their idol, teacher and friend, feeling angry and betrayed but only because of their love for this person.

I loved reading this poem!
Great job!

-Space

I also like how it's a letter. This rant is very, very ironic. "I don't hate you, but I wish I did," is contradictory. "I don't wish ill upon you," despite anger poring out of this pros poem like a broken faucet.

"Thank you, I guess," I'd like a 'So,' at the beginning to amplify the sass.

"I would be happy for you..." Then, "I hope you're happy..." Look back to my first paragraph.

I think your points could be further advanced if you split up the lines a little bit more. It doesn't have to be every 4, and it could still be chaotic like the rest of the poem, but it's kind of a hard read to me because there's very, very little clarity in this, but maybe that's the objective.

I love how you stick to letter format despite it obviously being a poem. I like they way it's not any type of poem at all and you have lines of various lengths, occasionally with multiple sentences on one line. You punctuate it like a letter as well, which I like.

I'm left a confused about why you switched pronouns in the middle of the poem/letter. You might be referring to how you weren't the only one left behind, but it's not very clear.

You use your title within the poem and if you like it, by all means, go ahead, but it seemed a bit off to me.

I love how you name certain flowers in the bouquet. This isn't a criticism, just a question: do the types of flowers mean anything? Just curious.

You really nailed the anger and guilt and hurt that the narrator must feel- probably because it's a personal story and this actually happened- and I find myself sort of hating this person- I viewed them as a neglectful parent- who just abandoned someone who was so obviously depending on them. I really enjoyed reading this, keep writing more!