Monster

That clay imagery, right at the start, that's gold!

"From what you are / from what we did," rhythmic flare, and a good follow up from previous lines.

"You ruined everything for me," is a good break. It's breaking up the backstory at the same time as breaking up the rhythmic structure. Again, super fly.

"Couldn't you tell I was calling out for help?" I sure couldn't tell, mr. Narrator, sir.

Narrator needs lady friend so she can be happy? very confused.

Maybe instead of, "and yes," you just say, "Yes / I should know."

Instead of, "That cheating is bad," maybe just "Cheating is bad," cause that would flow rhythmically into the next line well.

I enjoyed the way you said, "Cheating / is / not / okay."

This narrator be petty, and you show that well!

Now, I'm usually against curse words, but I loved its spared use in this poem.

Overall, the greatest strength is the use of line breaks. I completely get what you're trying to say. Some say clarity is bad, I say, "Why'd the artist write something people don't understand." That is to say, I like clarity. Greatest weakness, outside of lack of punctuation, and it's not really a weakness, but I would like to see some more imagery. That said, I'd have no idea where I'd put it, so I'll just move on.

Rating: 9/10. I liked a lot of things about this poem, but lack of punctuation, and not every poem needs a lot of deep meaning, but I can't rate it above guys like poe, and frost. I would, however, gladly group this work with theirs. So... yeah! Good job!

Hiiii! Space here for yet another review. (I didn't review the last one you wrote yet...oops. I'm sorrryyyy. ;-;)

I really like this poem, it has many 'themes' or 'lessons' such as unhealthy relationships, cheating, and dealing with sexuality and accepting yourself. The reader can clearly see how you feel about this person, that you/she thinks this person is a "monster", which is a word that I LOVE used in this context.

I do have some advice though. The poem is a tiny bit choppy, it doesn't roll off the tongue as much, and the gender of the person you/she fell in love with is slightly unclear. It might just be me though. ^^

Overall, this is a great poem. Good job!!

-Space <3

GOOD POEM ITS ALMOST LIKE SOMEONE HELPED YOU WITH IT WOAH THAT PERSON MUST BE GOOD AT GRAMMAR AND STUFF
WOAH
WOWIE
GOOD JOB
GOOD FORMATTING
WOWZA!!!

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