Just wait a few years,
They tell you.
Then the work will be hard.
Then you'll see.
You won't have time for
Your foolish games,
And childish pursuits.
But you wait a few years,
And the work's still easy.
And you still have time.
And you still play games.
And the others still scoff.
Just wait.
Just wait.
And it's another few years.
And you wait.
And wait.
But nothing's hard.
Nothing takes all your time.
Nothing fills you up
Enough to make you try.
And all you feel
Is empty.
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Hey! Izzy here for a review!
A few things with punctuation, but I am bad at punctuation myself so I am going to move on!
A very deep sad poem. They feel empty because they aren't happy with their work. They feel like they could do more in their life.
Overall, this is a very good poem, but the title is not fitting.
Izzy
Thanks for sharing.
The speaker tells us that he feels empty because he isn't challenged in his work. He seems trapped in a job that's far below his intellectual potential. A job other consider challenging but he obviously doesn't and so feels miserable. That happens to overeducated people who are doing jobs far below their potential. Very often they graduate from college and wind up doing repetitive paper-work.
Reminds me of what happened to a famous general who was demoted after Stalin became envious of his fame. He was given an office job shuffling papers around and looked miserable. I think the poem is written in a way intended to convey the tedium that such a person feels.
The game playing part might be the activities that the bored person engages in which the more simple-minded fellow workers consider mere games but which the speaker finds intellectually challenging.
There's a couple punctuation errors, but that's not really a big deal.
I like how the poem itself feels empty. Although, it is a very creative take, it does make it a mildly boring read until the very, very end. Also, this poem might have been better written in pros because most of the line breaks are immediately after punctuation's omitting the last 4 lines.
The title is good, but the description did not fit the work. This is very much a poem about waiting for life to get hard, but not for waiting to find your place in life. There's nothing here that illudes to a place in life. But, that's the description, and not the work itself. The work is about waiting, and as mentioned in my first/second paragraph, depending on your viewpoint, I was waiting for it to catch my interest which was not even the last 4 lines, but you may have done this on purpose.
I'm indecisive how I feel about this piece.