screamandshout

Okay, I really, really like this. There are some things to be worked on though. The punctuation is all over the place, mainly. "for looking down is surely a scornful ...

Alright, so first off, I really enjoy the poem itself. But the layout makes it a little difficult to read. Since poems are usually shorter lines, it through my reading ...

This is honestly an amazing poem. The entire thing was just captivating. The imagery was very crisp and it all flowed so well. The first stanza just drew me in,and ...

Alright, I'd like to say firstly that I adore the idea of the poem. It's captivating, in a way. But there are definitely a few little problems. The excessive use ...

Well obviously it's way to short for me to do a real reveiw, but either way, I like it. A couple commas would be nice, but they're not really needed ...

I really like this, even though it's clearly a rough draft. But it's not overly sugarcoated, and straight to the point. I think you should put this into paragraphs because ...

I think that it's really nice that you wrote this for your friend, and I love the poem. I agree with Ladypurple, the imagery was great. I hope to see ...

I really don't have anything to say review wise, but I completely agree with you. I really love Pit bulls and if my parents would let me, I would have ...

Ok I really love this poem, but there are a few things you should work on. The first thing I noticed is that you used the word "so" twice in ...

This was really sad, but in a good way. I liked the ending since I really diddn't see it coming. As it was said earlier, there were a couple of ...

First off welcome to YWS, and thanks for your imput on my poem. As other people said, a lot of spelling mistakes. If you wanted to help this a lot, ...

You misspelled father and insted wrote farther. No big deal i do that stuff all the time. you also need to indent on the new paragrahphs. And you start a ...

Not something i would normally read but its good. The main thing that bothered me is the 19th line. and the fall ain’t enough to kill me, but the word ...

This is good. I write a lot of poems but I couldn't ryhme evey other line and have it actully make sence. the only thing about it is in the ...

i dont agree with the ppl who say you used kill me slowly to much poems arnt as structured as stories and are completly for expression. and about ending it ...