Skysea
The sky is
A migrating sea seen through
The aquarium of the windows
Of a library.
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(Any suggestions as to how it might be broken up are welcome, also, because it originally started out as a single sentence that had some meter and rhyme to it, but...yeah. >>)
This poem paints a very cool picture. You have a lot of good imagery and unique description packed into a very short poem. The last two lines felt a little awkward in their wording to me, but I liked the idea of the library being like an aquarium. It would be interesting to see if you could elaborate on this at all, but I like what you have here.
Well obviously it's way to short for me to do a real reveiw, but either way, I like it. A couple commas would be nice, but they're not really needed since it's a poem. Maybe elaborate on it a bit more, add a few stanzas, but either way, I think it's nice, and straight to the point. Keep writing!