sarahjane97

Oh, ok, I see now. I interpreted the last line wrong. That's what I get for reading too fast! xD

Hello CloserToTheEdge! Sarah here to review. :) Well, you've certainly got me intrigued! I am already in love with the two main characters, and I feel that there are many ...

Congratulations on making the top five! I can definitely see why! The premise of this story is horrific, but it's written beautifully. I don't have any solid critique for this ...

Hello there! Sarah here to review! :) So far, so good! I really like it. It's well written and the pace is perfect--not slow and boring, but not fast and ...

Hello there Fallen Angel! :) Wow. The simple, raw emotion behind this poem blows me away. I've read bits and pieces of your work before, but never commented on them ...

Hi Michael! Sarah here to review! :) Wow. I've never read slam poetry before, but this is amazing! I love the rawness of it and all the emotions rushing at ...

No problem, I'm glad I helped! As for Kallie's friends' backgrounds...if you're planning to reveal them later, then go for it! It's probably better not to cram so much information ...

Wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow wow.

Wow, Michael. That was just...beautiful. Raw and emotional and a bit disjointed but beautiful. This had a fresh perspective, an unexpected (if sad) twist ending, and honest emotional weight. Keep ...

Hey Michael, it's me again. :) I just realized something. This story is set in September, 2001, right? If so, you may want to change this: A vacation… in 2003!! ...

Sad but beautiful. Good job. :)

This is a very touching peice. I never knew Martha, but from what I've heard she seemed like a very sweet and kind person.

WOW. This was a cute and humerous way to potray heartbreak. Usually, poems on this topic are very dark and heavy...this was exactly the opposite and gave me a fresh ...

I wasn't sure if you'd be able to say what you wanted to say with such a restricted amount of syllables, but you did it! Good job!

Wow. That was really good. The rhyming didn't feel strained, and parts of it were very true! My favorite sentence was the last one, "Please enjoy your stay". I love ...