sara13

Wow... that's probably the only word i can use right now. It was to the point and scattered at the same time. This should be published because i feel allot ...

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL! I love love love it! oh gosh took my breath away :P First of all i like how you explained her in a way that seemed like ...

This was very smartly done with the repeating sentences and how you created the strong image of how nothing was changing. The only thing i wish would have been to ...

wow... its really interesting! I love how you can't tell what the other person is saying (the weirdo) wow this is something else... hm... i think you can get this ...

Hey sara here This was a little repetitive for me at some times and in the beginning paragraph you were viewing the scene in first person then in third person... ...

OH what happens next? This was very very well written! :D I like how you used hands to first describe the "Monster" and the hands you described as being soft. ...

Hey :D I'm not really into grammar and small mistakes but I do want to let you know that this was very beautifully written. I understand that it is about ...

uhm... whoever you are.... i really love u! This was like amazing and so smartly thought up! I loved it. MAKE MORE PLEASE! for the sake of entertainment. :D Thanks ...

Alright... lets start from the beginning... I started reading and i felt like I was being hit with waves and waves of information. Plus, you didn't put comas and periods ...

Title is amazing and captured my attention. There where some parts you made mistakes with the "him", "he" and "her" parts that I got confused with. “I promise you, just ...

I really loved how you portraied the story in dad's eyes and kept switching back and forth between time lines that part was the best. I can't wait for more ...

That was a sweet story and I really liked it. I'm waiting for more so keep it up. IN my case you just made one mistake when you started talking ...

AWWW! that was very romantic and intresting. Loved it. Dancing, loving and all that jazz... i'm into it all. There where some moments when you sorda kinda changed you're lovely ...

There where many spelling mistakes and I got a little confused when you would suddenly skip to another scene without even ending the last one. I liked how you made ...

Hey good job Derek but there was a few times when you rushed the explanation of the fight or something like that. You where talking as if you where the ...