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I have a suggestion. If a "poem" is this long, put it in short stories, because if u don't the people that want to read poems won't review it, and ...

I quite liked this! I love the whole elfin thing, it's cute. Though it lacks detail and small things like that. Other than that, eveything has been mentioned. :)

thanks guys! the feedback is great!

Thanks so much! That is a great suggestion and I'm adding it now! :)

I didn't really like this poem, seeing as it seemed less like a poem to me, and more of a rant. If maybe it rhymed, or flowed smoother from the ...

Sad, but really really well written! Your poem is just my type!! Like Like Like Like Love!! :) Thank you for sharing this.

Haha! This is great! I really loved reading the clever rhyming, really brought a smile to my face! Great work! Thanks so much for sharing, I'll have to read this ...

Also, HIGHWHITESOCKS, the poem was referring to a storyline from a really old book.... it ended sadly. Originally the poem was simply about two girls being in love, but as ...

Butterfinger, I'm sorry. That was really immature. I just was a bit shocked because I worked really hard and I got a rude response. If you had given me pointers ...

well, it wasnt made for immature people :)

WOW. Amazing. That's really all I can say. You are TRULY talented. Keep up your writing, I'm following you. Awesome.

Thanks, I had that first thought myself, so I'll change it now!

Yeah, I wrote this about a week ago, and I wasn't really in a mood for grammar. Haha, if you've ever read any of my other work you'll see its ...

Thanks very much everyone!!! AdoxagraphyAngelus, thanks for the suggestions, I've edited it accordingly!

I didn't like it much because I don't feel like many people will be able to relate to it, myself included. Good poetry is mostly defined by what you like, ...