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Re: Travel Through Space
I liked this poem! It was simply fun to read. I have a few word choice suggestions, but the rest of the poem just works. First, I would say change ...
Oct 7, 2015 -
Re: Safe and Sound
Well all I can say is, that was quite a twist. The last line could be much more powerful. If you want to make it more intense and less... realistic, ...
Oct 7, 2015 -
Re: The Only One
Hey. Rachelle here. You wrote this in a strange way. There were a lot of typos and stuff. Also, your character seems a little flat. Does she not have any ...
Mar 23, 2015 -
Re: Cipa 2
I read part one of this a while ago. I really enjoyed this. I think it was short though. I would like this to be longer. I don't know what ...
Mar 23, 2015 -
Re: Fairies in May
Hey! Rachelle here. I just wanted to say, that I think this poem was a good start. There are definitely different ways for you to improve. First off, you abandoned ...
Mar 23, 2015 -
Re: Bleed ink, shall I?
Hey! Rachelle here for a review. Let me start by saying, your poem was completely captivating. When I began reading this, I was stressed and frustrated. I started reading and ...
Mar 22, 2015 -
Re: The Song of the Mountain King
Hey! Rachelle here for a review. First of all, I have to say, once I read that it was about the Hobbit I was like "Omigosh I need to read ...
Mar 19, 2015 -
Re: somehow
This poem was very short. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you can always make a poem longer. Second, I assume that this poem is about an experience you ...
Mar 19, 2015 -
Re: To The Stars Above (chapter 2)
Well, one thing I can say is that I wasn't disappointed. This chapter was better than the last. I do have a few complaints and suggestions. There wasn't really a ...
Mar 18, 2015 -
Re: Rubbernecking
I don't know why, but your poem really spoke to me. Actually, I do know why. But I'm here to review, not throw a pity party. So here is what ...
Mar 17, 2015 -
Re: To The Stars Above (chapter 1)
Hello hello. I just want to say that this was actually pretty cute. This is just an assumption, but he's actually a star right? 21-B-6 sounds like a name for ...
Mar 17, 2015 -
Re: The post-perpetual world - Quicksand
This was a nice story. I liked it. There is a lot of stories about Asia now... I like them. I have always enjoyed their cultures. This was a very ...
Mar 16, 2015 -
Re: Spring Goddess
This was a very short poem. Sometimes that can be a good thing. I have no idea if it is with this poem or not. Maybe look into that. It ...
Mar 16, 2015 -
Re: Limbo
This is a good haiku. I honestly haven't written one in a while. So I don't have any nitpicks but I do have a suggestion for you. You should write ...
Mar 16, 2015 -
Re: Apple-Oranges
Whoa... That was beautiful... So symbolic. Okay, here's the thing. You should expand on this. It was very short. I got hooked and then the poem died. There are a ...
Mar 16, 2015
