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First off, nice job. I liked it. I agree though, the rhythm is completely off. Punctuation, punctuation, punctuation ;) ! Also, try breaking up the lines differently. Rewrite it a ...

Four Men on a Boat 4 men on a boat and its starting to sink What can we do, we all need to think Make this two lines Bail out ...

Sit back. Relax. The name will come to you in due time. Trust me. I have had many struggles with this before and, as soon as you stop fretting/ thinking/ ...

This is a great poem! It reminds me so much of New York... even though I don't live there. When everything is said and done Out comes again, a wakening ...

Great poem! I hate it when my friend brag ;) [spoiler]I brag a little when I write something really good, but I don't anything else![/spoiler] My friends, they brag about ...

Hi, Peanut here! I'm here to review your poetry today! "What good," she asks, "will fighting do? It still will fail. Once more, you'll wail and dredge up old wounds ...

Hey, Peanut here! Lets take a look at this, shall we:?: I had to put back the moon for it would be night time soon and after doing so, home ...

Wow. That was truly heart-touching; which is exactly what a true poem needs. It needs to reach out to others, tell them how you feel with words, the words that ...

Hi, June! The table have turned, now I am the one reviewing your piece! Here I go; In a flurry of pages And spaces blank; Various stages Of works in ...

Peanut here! Lets go over this together, shall we? I often wonder why, Is it that when they step out, Everyone looks. When there is a girl here crying and ...

Hi! Peanut here. You're pieces seem to speak to me, so, here I am to review another and, this time, I'm not on my cell phone so I can make ...

wow. That was really good :) I liked it. Just one thing though: you started almost every single stanza the same way. I would suggest begginning some of them a ...

Whoa. I thought I was a good amateur poet until now! Now I'm not even amateur! This poem is awesome! I wish I would've written this... :oops: :wink: :oops: I ...

Awesome poem! I can't really review you because everyone else already covered everything I saw that was incorrect. So, all I can do is say, nice job! I hope to ...

I love this poem! It's really good. Just this one thing; until that hartbreaking August day. You misspelled heartbreaking. That's all I really found that was wrong, and that was ...