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I liked this! A lot... sorry for the amazingly short review, but it seems June covered it all... and I completely agree with her! I would mostly worry about the ...

Peanut here to review! My mom yelled, with the hugest smile on her face. I would use a different word other than 'hugest'... it really isn't a great word to ...

Hero music plays*... Peanut to the rescue! :D You swish and slide. You just bounced back I better run and hide. Stay low, pounce, attack. This stanzas rhythm is off ...

Awesome first paragraph... hmm... a little bit confusing second paragraph... As I turned back a twisted hand of bark and twigs caught in my hair, pulling strands loose and leaving ...

Peanut here! Lets review; It, it, it, it, it... I would try to think of an original beginning for some of them... any of them! Also; bursts,leaving put a space ...

Hmm... I liked it, but I think it needs a little more fluff , like bubble said. It seems flat line... and you know what our Language Arts teacher says! ...

Hey! Peanut here... here to review! *hero music plays in background* This fear of losing you, Even though your right here. Wrong version of 'your'... the correct way would be ...

Hmmm... you need to un-focus on the same exact thing... it seems like you were thinking of different elements, but not different senses, or different styles of writing the haikus. ...

Hmm... I'm not sure these are poems exactly... The format they are in makes it hard to tell... I would try putting them either a) in stanzas or b) put ...

Hello! Peanut critic to the rescue! The moon; a joyous glint of light, playing peak-a-boo with the metropolitan night. This seems to be the only part that rhymes... I don't ...

Hi! Let's review; “Daddy?!” She started to scream franticly. 'Franticly' is misspelled. 'Frantically' is the correct spelling. Falling onto his chest she checked his heartbeat. A comma should go a

Hello! Peanut here. ;) You marched our soldiers, Out to war. I wouldn't put a period right here, quite yet. I think, judging on the next line, it is just ...

I'll try not to be harsh... kidding! I'm normally not extremely harsh anyway, see? :smt083 “Why, Renn do you think I would be so rude as to not call in ...

Since I have never reviewed a script before, and am probably terrible at it since I can't find a thing to correct with all dialogue, then I will just tell ...

There is a beauty in life, as there is a beauty in death, just as all things natural have their own beauty, their own light Such do we also have ...