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I liked this, and part 2 too. It's kind of hard to review, however. Though you posted it in the shortstory section, it's obviously a brief sequel. It's hard to ...

A word of warning before you start reading my review. I really don't like superheroes/mutants novels because I feel that novelists always tap into the same vein, re-writing the same ...

Hi, Cadi. I loved this shortstory. It had everything I like : an engaging protagonist, humor and a wonderful bit of absurd. A little bit of nit-picking, to begin with : shouldn't ...

Hi, Beccalicious. As an author, I have several issues with this. First of all, you labelled it as an essay but it was midway between it and a shortstory for ...

Hi, Aleta. First things first, parts of this « Forelog » felt awkward – mostly because of punctuation. Myjaspercat went over everything already so I won't. I have a feeling that you ...

Hi, Ann. I have no objection to starting out with « Hello, my name is Emily. » If Herman Melville's Moby-Dick can start out with « Call me Ishmael. », why couldn't you let ...

Hi again, Lolosboing. I just reviewed The Broken China Doll and I must say I hadn't realized you were the author of this poem as well. It's so much more ...

Hi, I loved the subject of your poem, although it does make me wonder why people are so obsessed with broken toys. There are songs, poems, even entire novels about ...

Hi, Shademaster. I had small issues with your writing but the others went over them already. I won't get into a repeat performance here. It was nonetheless an interesting shortstory ...

Hi. Be careful with the quotes. I remember a monologue of Célimène's I particularly liked in the 2007 movie « Molière ». She mocks an author for hiding behind great thinkers the ...

Hi, Aritra. First things first : this first chapter was too long. You need to cut it into smaller sections if you want to attract more reviewers. This first chapter made ...

Hi. Over all, I liked this chapter. I was not sure it was wise to start out with the part where he faints during practice because it builds up rather ...

Hi, Wandering Cloud. It was a pretty nice poem, actually, very simple in its imagery but efficient. I have only two issues, really. The rhythm isn't quite there yet. It ...

Hi, Holy. There were several very small issues and typos but Biscuit did a good job of spotting them. You do suspense well. I mean, not only were we feeling ...

Hi, Captainearth. I must admit that I had a moment of hesitation before beginning to read your essay. Ghosts and demons sound a little out there but I try to ...