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It's interesting, and I like the rhyme scheme. As the reviewer before me said, the second stanza was rather choppy. I would've prefered that you kept the five line rhyme ...

Add more emotion. This is too peppy for a suicide story. I mean, I can't feel for the character, nor do I get the feeling of depression. It seems like ...

Right from the start I am pulled in, and I can't tear it apart because of that. I'm going to do a mild review however. The grammar is good and ...

I liked it a lot. It was very funny and anticlimatic at the end. I feel the same way also when I'm writing a new story, except the old characters ...

I love the rhyme. It really unwinded me after reading it. I love the rhyme scheme and it reminded me of Poe's rhymes. That made me happy since I barely ...

This is a powerful story and I could see the hurt in it all. I'm sorry that you had/have to go through bullying like that. Those people are simply arrogant ...

This is an interesting scene and it's well written. I can't find any grammatical or spelling issues within this. The feelings are shown through this and I can imagine this ...

It's a rather sad poem, and something I feel right now. It's good, very good, but there are a few things I'd like to point out. The ending was a ...

This is a very good poem and I enjoyed reading it. In my opinion, it is flawless. I am surprised that you are willing to talk about sin so openly ...

This is powerful. I love how you focus on the surroundings and let the emotions kick in. While many would say not to use fragments, which you did multiple times, ...

This is a very entertaining poem. At first I thought it was serious, then I thought it was about a bag of chips, and finally after I read the last ...

Interesting, very good. I like that you used superheroes in this to portray a normal guy. This is something that a lot of people could relate to. However I have ...

This is rather different and gives me a strange impression. It reminds me somewhat of war. Don't ask me how, but it does. It's dark and then has that little ...

Interesting, that's how I feel when I do it...not that I do. Been clean for three months! Haha, this is great! It's engaging, pulling you in and at the end, ...

It is a wonderful poem. It's interesting the way you repeat the word "simple." When I think of that word, I think stupid, but you mean innocence. It actually took ...