pandoraswritings

No, keep trying. You'll get it sooner or later. Most of the people here have been writing for EVER! Pandora

Shraz, Welcome to TYWS. I liked this. It was very nice, but it had little meaning behind it. I understand how butterflies are delicate like she was, but I was ...

I like the style you write with. Beautiful.\ Fav. part: "sleep for the moment dream if you can one day you will cease to be " BEAUTIFUL Pandora

Wow! This was AMAZING! I was in awe the entire time I was reading. It is so beautiful! Please please please write more. This sounded so professional and so put ...

You are lacking emotion. What you say may be true, but it is not put in a proper manner. And why is love so crazy? You don't explain that. And ...

I didn't like this one either. (posted on other of your poems) It has many typos and spelling errors. Fand is right, no one will take you seriously for the ...

Very different. I enjoyed reading this, especially the way the sentences run. I liked the way you used the names he was called. It not only makes you think about ...

I love the first two lines. They seem very strong. But the rest seems a bit shaky to me. Is that the end, or is there more? Pandora

Cathy, It's very sweet. But the last line was very long. Pandora

Sharty, I loved reading this, it not only brang a smile to my face, it made my day. It was such an odd subject to write about, but you pulled ...

Swottielottie, Not too bad. As niteowl said, a bit of mistakes, but it was a good read. Nice job. I hope to read more of your work. Pandora

Lexy, I found this a wonderful read, a bit short, but wonderful. But it does sound like something that is a work in progress. Loved it! Pandora

Also, I'm a bit confused about: "I can stop and stay Play everyday" I just don't undersatnd how it fits into the poem. Pandora

I enjoyed reading this. I like the way you say "silencing all evil and caressing all pain." B-e-a-utiful! Good job! Pandora

Contrary to what others said, I like this, I think you use the "do you ..." line a bit too much, but nevertheless, it's beautiful to me. Pandora