oregongirl

I think that you used TOO much rhyming in this poem. Try to work on that and it will be a lot better.

You really killed the poem by saying "friendship" so many times. Also I think you should work on punctuation. You put periods after every line except the last one in ...

I think you definitely over used the title. I think it was pretty good. good job! :D

I think you should add more caps I agree with kitty15. and also add a little more punctuation. good job :D

I liked this poem a lot! I think you did a really good job! :) Great job!

Good description in this poem! I really liked this! Good job and keep it up!

hello! I think this poem had a good concept. I liked it. Good job and I love your poems btw! :elephant:

WOW! I really liked this! Good description! um...I think maybe you need a little more punctuation but except for that great poem! :elephant:

I agree with Incandescence. You could seriously get people wrong ideas about this because of talking about Christianity. The language was ood. It wasn't my fav :(

Hi! :) good poem. But I am going to have to say that the last too paragraphs were confusing Well anyway good job!

Wow you ended it at the correct time I agree! Good descriptions! I really liked it! :elephant:

This was good. :) Your description was very good. It didn't grab me that firmly but it was pretty good. Great Job.

Great story! I love your work! :D Keep up the awesome work!

GREAT! These are great! I have read I think all of the ones recently posted! :D

good job again! you are doing really well on these! :D