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Thank you for the critiques. To answer your question, this wasn't part of a longer story. I was going for plot driven, but I'll try to add some background about ...

Thank you for the comments. Eimear- This poem was basically about Sherlock Holmes encountering a mystery that he could not solve using reason and evidence so he is forced to ...

Thank you for the critique. I'll try to put them in a place, perhaps in school during a break or something like that. One of my weaknesses has always been ...

Wow, I was trying to critique one of your things as repayment for you critiquing one of mine but this is really good. I'll try with the next poem you ...

This is really good. My only recommendation would be to get rid of some of the to be verbs you have in there so that the poem flows more smoothly.

Thank you for the critics everyone. I'll try to cut down on all the junk I have in there. That's one of my major problems. The hymnal thing, however, was ...

Wow, this is a good poem. The only line I would change would be "warm and pure and radiant" to "warm, pure, and radiant" It just seems to flow better.

Well, other than a few typos, this is a really good story. It's not corny and it gets straight to the point. :)

AAAAH. Why is it that, out of all the people that I have talked to who read this book, only my English teacher and I actually like it!?

Thanks for the critiques. I'll try to use less big and/or unneccessary words next time I write and I'll try to make my topic more clear. Also, J., the essay ...

Um, Whence said that syllable length was optional and I missed the last line when I was copying and pasting it from the contest thread. Here it is complete. Meaning: ...

This poem is awesome; I can't really think of anything wrong with it. Good rhythm, good topics and nice twist at the end. Good job :)

Thanks for the comments guys; I edited my poem to try to follow some of your advice but I couldn't follow all of it because it would interrupt with my ...

I think that this is a really cool poem. The repetition worked beautifully but I do agree that a new image might be needed. (I do thesame thing my self ...

Well, its basically about a kid with asthma who has sort of been chosen to wield a blade. The kid lives on earth but there is a parallel world in ...