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Hello, occymay here to review your work! The first thing I want to mention is that I love the concept of this piece, that the main character is some kind ...

Hello again! So this on didn't make as make sense as the previous chapter but more so than the first one. I liked that the God King appeared but if ...

Hello again! Positives- I really liked this chapter, I just thought I would say. One thing I really liked was Theobald, he was a surprising character and I guess he ...

Hello again! Positives- I really love your character's interactions in this chapter. Like when Grimhilda is interrogating Leni and the argument between Keya and Akio. They were really good because ...

Hello again! If I add this to the previous chapter it makes so much more sense: I now understand who and what priests and priestess are and a bit more ...

Hello, occymay here to review your work! So I think this piece needs a lot of work but this is clearly a first draft. You said this was part of ...

Hello, occymay here to review your work! I loved this, it was short and sweet and very relatable. Positives- I love the beginning paragraph, I could relate to what she ...

Hello again! This time I reviewed when I said I would :D Positive- "broomsticks and bicycles chained to racks, flying horses grazing in every small riverfront park, magic carpets stacked ...

Hello, occymay here for another review! Sorry again for not getting to this when I said I would. I really shouldn't give out time frames for when I'm going to ...

Hello, occymay here for another review! I'm sorry, it's been a while since my last review of your work, I have had a tough weekend and literally had no motivation. ...

Hello! It's occymay here for a promised review. I have to say I really love this story, it's comical in places and dark in others which works so well together. ...

Hello! Sorry that this was later than I said but the motivation for anything has been a big issue the past couple of days. Positives- This is obviously a slower ...

Hello again! If you'd like you can tag me when you post these so they don't spend so long in the green room and you can have a consistent reviewer. ...

Hello again! Sorry this is so late but the last review day left me completely drained! Overall another good chapter though I feel that it could be a lot better ...

Hello again! Okay, this chapter was a lot better, there was much more happening. I did get a bit confused at first with the change from first person to third ...