Hello hello! You asked me to read this a million years ago and I'm so sorry it's taken me this long!!! One small disclaimer, I'm much more well-versed in contemporary than SF/F, and while I do like some SF/F, things that confuse me or that I don't like may be due to my relatively limited SF/F experience
1. Mood/atmosphere - I dig it. It's a very interesting tone and I'm trying to think of a word to describe the mood/atmosphere for me. I am getting a philosophical vibe and I'm also feeling kind of an eerie/mysterious vibe. I like that you gave details without a lot of information. You give little hints about the world like mentioning the Luneset and some people and places while obviously describing this mass grave sort of thing, but that's it. I don't really know how all of these pieces are going to fit together or what the significance of anything is, and rather than wanting to throw in the towel and say I'm confused, I'm intrigued.
2. World building - I touched on this in my last little ramble. I like the details rather than information for right now. The descriptions you gave about the world are very detailed and fit in with the overall tone. My only qualm is that I started to get a little lost in the descriptions. I noticed you had a lot of long sentences. I'm not sure if I started to get lost because of the long sentences or because after a while all of the descriptions about this unfamiliar world started to become overwhelming. I'm also not sure what is going to end up being important or significant and what I need to be sure I remember. (I know I just said I like all of the little pieces and not knowing how they're all going to fit because that intrigues me, that's still true. But maybe there are too many little pieces? I don't know, this could just be a personal problem :p)
I really like the name Moya!
I'll leave things there for now and come back for more later! I am looking forward to seeing how the plot begins to unfold in this opening chapter and learning more about Moya and this world! Let me know if you have any questions or if there was something you'd like feedback about that I didn't mention!
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