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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Naked in the City

    Here's what I thought when I read this piece: "He sure says 'eleven-year-olds' a lot. Is this a flashback?" I got the feeling that the speaker was looking back on ...

    Feb 21, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hate Me

    I like it. Ironic and makes me feel a bit annoyed. But in a good way. Not much to say, but here's what I've got: Hate me, hate me, and ...

    Feb 21, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: battered bob dylan wanna-be

    I love this. It's effortless. The reader can feel himself transformed into the setting you create. I can feel the concrete under my feet and hear the hum of the ...

    Feb 15, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Because - Chap. 27

    “No,” I answered. “Most of the dreams are different. They’re all on the same night, but he never says the same things, or does the same things. I only see ...

    Jan 25, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Fairytale

    I think darko was unnecessarily harsh. This has real potential! Hand in his Warm, damp, and firm. Fingers curl. I don't understand this "fingers curl" line. It sounds like they ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Waiting to Bloom

    I read this yesterday, but I think I was only half paying attention. This is great! Really original and interesting and has a great voice. And once you know how ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Abandoned

    Is this right? When I read about what the wind was doing to the room, I imagined it was mirroring what was happening to the old man fishing. Did he ...

    Jan 17, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: "Do you feel as good as you put on?"

    I like this poem. It makes me feel very sad. I just see a girl a girl A girl who's eyes are vacant of everything but sadness You can see ...

    Jan 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Cold

    At first I just thought this was like To Build a Fire like Jack London, which I hate. But the more I read it, the more I liked it. I ...

    Jan 16, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Courage

    This might sound harsh, but only because I think it has potential. Renee woke up with sweat over her. That’s damn nightmare she thought as she toss the covers away ...

    Jan 16, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Shocked: a suspense/mystery

    I liked this. “Well, I think that irony is over, because the thing’s fixed now.” replied the young man. You had a few of these mistakes. When a quotation is ...

    Jan 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Do Killers go to Hell?

    I really like this poem. I like the setting and mood you create, and the voice. He knew the choices that you made Were not for glory, He knew you ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Because - Chap. 25

    I want you to know that I just read this entire story in one straight shot. It's addicting. Well-written. It sounds like something that would actually be a real book. ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The beginning

    I like this. It leaves me intrigued. all the while watching and waiting to make its last hit on you. This might just be me, but I think the meaning ...

    Jan 15, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Rotten Banana

    I love it. I love the voice. And I just feel like it doesn't try to do too much. I think it's effortlessly interesting. "a wobegone reject at the bottom ...

    Jan 13, 2009


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