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nevanoel

  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Let me

    Hey! So you have been giving me some great reviews on my pieces, and I wanted to return the favor. I'm not the best at poetry, but I'll try my ...

    Dec 2, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Supernatural Re: The Protector

    Hey! I really liked this, and I cannot wait for you to send me more. :D For starters, your dialogue in the beginning was realistic and captured sibling banter. The ...

    Dec 2, 2012
  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: the fear

    I am a suck for reviewing poetry, but this piece stood out to me so much that I felt some type of comment was necessary. :D I really loved it. ...

    Dec 2, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Slave to Master

    Oh my god! This is sooo creepy and amazing. I love it. It's just... ahhh! You're wonderfully dark. I dig. Neva

    Dec 1, 2012
  • Other » Narrative, General Re: What Monster?

    Hey! You are not alone. In fact, you are so far from it. It's just hard to see right now. I promise. I was diagnosed as depressed terminally. I am ...

    Dec 1, 2012
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Horror Re: Immortality

    "Its unrest was eternal; it yearned and wept for the life half still going , although it desperately wanted to die." I absolutely love this sentence(or maybe it's just the ...

    Nov 29, 2012
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: Thankful For Daddy

    I read the comments, and I just love how you made it sound like an event in that you were talking about that had actually happened to you. I actually ...

    Nov 29, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Connected by An Invisible String

    I apologize for me lack of substance and actual critique in this comment, but I just wanted to tell you how much I liked your piece. It made me smile. ...

    Nov 29, 2012
  • Other » Other, Dramatic Re: "Always!"

    Because of the length, the only critique I can give you would be on grammar. (I know. Boo! Grammar Nazi!) I found a misplaced comma/semicolon/quotation/space in almost every line. This ...

    Nov 29, 2012
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Kissing Before Breaking

    I am speechless. This is so... so.... Gah! I cannot even describe how fantastic this is. It is just so... raw? It is vivid and punctually in your face in ...

    Nov 28, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Beauty

    Hi. This made me happy. I would tear it apart, but I'm kinda just in the mood to bask in how nice it made me feel. Sorry, if you were ...

    Nov 28, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Seeing Distance

    This piece is very mind-probing. I really appreciated the perspective in which you wrote it. The second person point of view really marks it as a stand out. However, it ...

    Nov 28, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: 15

    I really really like this. I wish I could help you out with some enlightening critique, but I don't think there is much to criticize. One note, the "in my ...

    Nov 28, 2012
  • Short Story » Other, General Re: It's Supposed To Be Sunny

    Hi. You are fantastic. Period. I love the abstract "vibe" of the piece. You way you narrate through your work is just mesmerizing. "Do you ever walk outside at night ...

    Nov 28, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, Other Re: Love Me Or Leave Me

    First of all, give yourself a little more credit. You're author note slightly deters from the good of the piece. My inner grammar nazi found no big errors. I really ...

    Nov 28, 2012


I'm also not sure why but even though I normally wear cool tones I have a feeling red would have been my color in the 1860s.
— Elinor