mihaivisan

I don't normally answer to reviews, but since yours was so detailed, I feel indebted to you. I see what you mean by 'obvious foreshadowing', but reading the first three ...

Hi! It's one novella, separated into smaller, easier to digest chunks. This fifth part actually does contain foreshadowing, just not where you thought. Thanks for taking the time to review; ...

thanks for the input, i liked reading your review - not because it was so positive, but because you made some really good points about writing. you should read the ...

haha, thanks for the kind words, but i wasn't saying i was going to stop writing this story (i actually have a lot of it written on my laptop), just ...

i'm glad you liked it, i was about to stop posting, since there was no interest in it

i agree that there was much more to be said, but the contest has a 500-words limit

My pleasure. Keep writing and feel free to message me whenever you publish something new.

Oh, and something that I forgot to mention: it really seems like a nursery rhyme!

"Who am I? A celebrity? A sports icon? An acclaimed actor? The truth is I am nothing." - I would stop right here, and then continue from "So I realize ...

Hi! It's actually about the way you need to pronounce it; for example: "The doorknob turned under your HAND And it SENT cracks through the wall" and "The roof then ...

Hahahahah, No, it actually was a very warm night!

"Rarely in a poem can you mix up the part of the sentence in this way and get away with it; it usually ends up coming off as if you're ...

I like the editions. There are big differences between this draft and the first ones, and I'm waiting for you to update it, 'cause I know you've been working on ...

Excellent suggestion! Thank you!