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Alright, Then a smile spread across my face when I uttered the words. Snow day. Change it too A smile spread across my face when I uttered the words, "Snow ...

I really liked this. It was different, something I had never really read before. It was different for someone to write in the point of view of the creepy, stalker ...

This is good! Just a few things... The wind met her and blew with such force it seemed to be forcing her back; [s]see[/s] she ignored it and headed for ...

This was pretty good! Now on to the critique. “Kristy, would you please come up and see me” Miss Candy asked me. Miss Candy is one of the science teachers ...

This was really good and only slightly depressing, but good. So here are a few nitpicks I found... "Well what's wrong with that?" he said, half to himself. "It's just ...

This is a very good story, but a few nitpicks... “Oh you know what, Maria,” Rob inhaled noisily, “go fuck yourself… or him! Whichever you want.” The correct way would ...

The numbers really confused me. They honestly were not needed, they were quite distracting. Overall, this poem was really nice and well written, keep writing poems because they are very ...

I liked it and it was very descriptive and it kept my interest. However, the fact that you had to tell us that she didn't have a twin wasn't good. ...

This is really good just make sure that you seperate the paragraphs. The paper I had been holding fluttered to the ground as I stood there frozen showing no signs ...

It's good but you should always read over your work. Not just once but many times to fix any errors because there are quite a few. Also, I had some ...

Wow, I really loved this. It was so sad and it almost reminded me of a short story I once wrote. Not nearly as wonderful as this poem was. I ...

Good concept with good writing style. You do need to add comments to some parts. There was only one part in particular that stood out to me that needed fixing...maybe. ...

I believe that to improve this story you would need to add much more detail. Add more of what the puppy is thinking. I wondered about his emotions, was he ...

How am i to keep living with such a secret? Secret was spelled wrong so I fixed it. She hears cries at night, for I can't cry at day.Oh how ...

Great story so, on with the review!!!! His shoulders were thin, even under the coat she had insisted he wear the new angles were accented. I just added a comma, ...