martinasxo

This was a very cute poem. I enjoyed reading every line except for one. When you wrote toward the end, "all of them are wicked witch!", I understood what you ...

I liked the poem a lot, but something doesn't sit right with me as I read "Life going under" after you have just written in present tense right before it. ...

I really love reading works that tie in the holocaust, so this was a must when I saw that it dealt with that. Immediately I began thinking of the movie ...

I really liked the suspense leading up to the ending of this short! A couple things I noticed were minor mistakes. In the first paragraph you write "But, now, looking ...

Very relatable poem not just to girls, but anyone really. I can say I've been in the situation myself with ease. As gravity stated, sometime you seem forced when trying ...

This was beautifully written, and I loved it. Loved how the character is "wounded" by the "precious rose" but still loved every minute of it. My favorite part being, "Her ...

I've never experiences depression first hand but I know of people who have. This story gave a good insight on those who don't really know what depression can really do ...

I usually don't like the whole zombie type of fiction because there really isn't much to elaborate on that no one else has done. This short was actually very appealing ...

There are some grammatical errors, I think you need to add some commas into the story. For example, when Adelise responds to Bonnie by saying "i'm sorry that's sad" there ...

I agree with Paprika's review. The line "What he gave to me" throws off the flow a bit, but still gives an illusion nonetheless. I like the characteristics you give ...

Very interesting read. I'm not a huge poetry person, as I myself find it hard to look past the words and find meaning within them. I like this poem though, ...

I enjoyed reading this entry. My only problem is that I think you should add more descriptive detail in the story. I liked the way you described the sandy beach, ...

This is the first poem I've read on this site and I really liked it. I really liked how you described the girl as a scavenger, as it gives great ...

Really liked the flow of the story, and how effortless the characters seem to sound when together. I'm not huge on the genre of "immortal falls in love with mortal" ...

You have some spelling mistakes that you should definitely fix. "But to my disappointed meant...", "it was out special spot", are some sentences that need revising. I like the overall ...