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Hey! Apple Dumpling Gang here for a short review. I liked this poem, and my favorite part was: I needed to drag the dried chains from my body and breathe ...

Hey! Apple Dumpling gang member here for a review! There are some spelling errors, but I'll leave that to you. Also, and this is bugging me, was the 'you' on ...

Hey :D This was a great concept! Maybe it's just me, but I've never seen anything like it before. You may want to keep in mind that an oxymoron, despite ...

Hey! A short review. I liked this poem, and I especially liked Civil rights for example, That fight was ample. But in the end, We learned that blacks and whites ...

Hey! It's review day! I liked this. Nice, clear motive, and well rounded, since you answered all the questions that you brought up. My favorite part was this: And the ...

Hey Mary Sue! Much of what I wanted to say has been said, so I'll keep it short. First of all, this really doesn't sound like a prologue :3 When ...

There comes a few times in YWS where I feel unqualified to review something. This is one of those times. Absolutely stunning! I think the strongest point in this piece ...

Short Review. This is cute! I liked your use of differing perspectives, and your vivid descriptions of the experience. The way you used the refrain "If I could walk on ...

Not a review, I'll probably come back tomorrow to review this :D As for now, are you somehow grateful for god's reminder at the end? Or am I misunderstanding? Next, ...

Hey! I came back cause you needed help :D I'm guessing you meant about the portion where I said something like " development after you mentioned his habit of throwing ...

Hey there! Just dropping off a short review. I liked this poem! Not much of a religious person, but I can feel your firm faith through your words. So first ...

Hey there! This is a review, but after thinking about it, I feel like I'm just agreeing with everyone else (: I think you need to add a bit more ...

Hey there! Just a short review. I liked the concept of the ending, but as D4RKR4VEN said, it wasn't fresh. You don't have to change it entirely, but you probably ...

Hey there! Stopped by to review(: I love the way you used the whole 'the early bird gets the worm' thing! Allusions are not easy to manipulate, but you have ...

*tears* This was lovely! The main challenge with children's stories, I think, is to keep it interesting and yet bring across the more serious underlying message. It was meaningful and ...