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  • Short Story » Humor, Dramatic
    Re: The eternal quest

    I decided to ignore the bit about it being an autobiographic piece, and ended up feeling like this was some sort of riddle, after which I tried to think metaphorically ...

    Jun 5, 2014

  • Short Story » Horror, General
    Re: Run till it catches up

    One question. Who's writing this, if you've been swallowed up? :D Hey there! It's Malachitear here for a review! I like what you tried to do here, a real gory, ...

    Jun 5, 2014

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Death Has No Friends

    Hey there! It's Binder here for a review. I really like the idea behind this, and liked your little attempt at the imagery at the end. Unlike the reviewer before ...

    Jun 5, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: do not go softly

    I came here because of the title, thinking you were using some kind of spin off the poem, 'Do not go softly into that Good Night' by Dylan Thomas. I ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: I didn't mean for this to happen

    Hey! Another pleasing review by the Apple Dumpling Gang! ( I'm starting to get used to this) I loved the way you made this poem have a nice, circular ending, ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Poetry » General, Lyrical
    Re: Imagination

    Another Apple Dumpling-brand Review! I love the image of the lotus, like the user below me, but I feel as though it could have been replaced with another stalked flower ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Absence

    Hey! Apple Dumpling Gang here for a review. I liked the way you made it seem so hard for the persona to hold on to anything, and I feel that ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: Modern Love Poems

    Hey there! Apple Dumpling Gang here for a review. Double whopper! The first was amusing, a tad sweet, and the second was sad :( I liked the first's concept, and ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Unnamed-II

    I was a little uncomfortable reading this at first, after seeing the rating and reding the phrase "Touched his masculine arms" because I really had the sense I was about ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Other » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: The Charm of Deception, excerpt

    Hey there! Apple Dumpling Gang here for a review. Now one thing that I liked here, (and this surprise me, too) is that you used dialogue pretty well. When I ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Spiritual
    Re: It's Time to Celebrate

    Hey there! Apple Dumpling Gang for a short review. My favorite line was the last, because it's one of the few times you used a half-rhyme, and that really made ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Anime in our world WHAT?!?!

    Woah. As an anime fan, I am partial to this. I liked the fact that used naruto characters in here, too, but maybe this was more suited to another, anime ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Short Story » Horror, Narrative
    Re: Short gothic story "The Path" - Draft

    Hey there! Apple Dumpling Gang for a review! It took me a while to read this through, but I thought it was rather good! The part I liked best was ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Short Story » Realistic, Science
    Re: Who needs nine lives?

    Hey! Apple Dumpling Gang for a review! This story was great! It had everything necessary in a good plot, you handled everything rather well. The only thing I felt was ...

    Nov 24, 2013

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Ethereal Cremation of the Self

    Hey! I'm here from the Apple Dumpling Gang for a review! I really liked the first part, and then it turned dark and gave me chills. My favorite part was ...

    Nov 24, 2013


When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
— LadyMysterio