lyssiekins

Well I think this poem sets me up for the failure part right away when you say you don't like poetry, lol. The secret to poetry, as of all writing, ...

Hey. Very good poem, I love the flow, and the subject. Some of my favorite parts include: " I have found that the less you say, The more you tend ...

Hi there. Its been awhile since I reviewed any poetry, but I will give this a go. My favorite part was the last two sentences. I really enjoyed the way ...

Hi there. I couldn't help but notice you wrote nurtuture in the end of the third stanza, which I think you meant as nurture. I know what you mean, in ...

Hello there, just wanted to review this. I noticed a few spelling errors. a loud roar of hapiness was seen, - happiness That's when we reached the semi-final stage, We ...

Yep this really hits home, man. I love the form this poem is in. So flowing and not a word wasted. One, "Wanger", - I see you put an extra ...

Hi there, just going to do a little review. I like reading this poem, going back and reading the title and then your username. Aha! A lightbulb goes off in ...

Hi there :) Just going to do a little review here. Colliding is spelled with 2 l's. Surrounded is 2 r's, vessel is 2 e's. I'm having a little trouble ...

Hi. Just wondering about this 3rd last line: As a scratch my somewhat, is it meant to be a or I? Anyhow... beautiful poetry. The fluidity and the painful truth ...

Hi there, i am just going to correct a few lines :) But I hadn't found away to move on. - in this sentence, the proper form is " a ...

Hi there, wow this poem scares me on the merit of the owls alone. Owls scare me!! I'm just going to critique a few lines: their tears staining their feathers ...

Hi :0 Nice poem, good repetition. The only suggestions I have are for these lines: Forgive me, For killing you on the inside and out - the word on seems ...

Hey :) Just wanted to point out: Putting you on the graves, Of are ghostly loved ones, - should be "our" loved ones. Beautiful poem. I love the ending especially. ...

Hi its me Lyss to do some more spell check for you since I enjoyed your other poem so much :) you are the bandit that travles both day and ...

Hi there, before I comment on the overall poem I am just going to correct a few spelling errors: sheets i roll out of- capitalize I -- i see daylight ...