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I love your writing but this relates to me more than any of your other works I've read! My favorite stanza is [i] Don’t steal all my sunshine, Or hide ...

For a haiku this was not a real one. Mostly haiku's are about nature, for the mystery concept it wasn't really a mystery for me. This would be better if ...

Same as the poet above me said, where are the commas and the periods. My stars are fading... Away from the sky, These times turn dark, And I don't know ...

Nice, this does tell a story about love. And welcome to YWS, you're speaking as if you've been here for months in a since. You're punctuation is great, but you ...

Bravo and yes I agree! Men can be so confusing at times, so much feeling went into this, I can tell. Only one thing I saw wrong was this; [i] ...

I liked this but the flow seems raged. A few commas would be good in it. Breaking it up into stanzas would also suffice. 'Laying on summer's edge..... The grass ...

Nice, I liked the idea of it. Oh and welcome to YWS! Here are a few pointer tips in the future, Hi, this is my very first poem and I ...

I think that every poem has something unique about it and this, my dear friend, is unique. I liked the flow of it, even though some parts were choppy. This ...

This poem was really cute but there were a few errors that I saw straight on, If I could make music, (Comma) I would definitely start off with a kick ...

I like the concept of this poem but they have a few things you could adjust to make your poem flow more easily. In my head I see nothing but ...

This was well written but use commas! This can easily be fixed just so it can flow better instead of being choppy. She’s scared because she knows they’re there, But ...

I wasn't feeling this poem very much, it seemed to be lacking some type of emotion I was looking for. Other than horror or someone being scared. It seemed like ...

Welcome to YWS! I can tell that you are very new here and you have much to learn. More properly speaking is the use of commas in your poems, incorrect ...

Good work ! But there are some parts that broke the rhyming you were making it made it flow uneven. I am sorry, Mr. Worm you are so very busy. ...

This was sort of short and to the point, but the use in punctuation was poorly writing and so was the capitalization. But it was unique in a way and ...