kevin25a

The story was really good overall. But you had so misspelled so many words I lost count somewhere after 30. Most were minor enough to not be confusing and although ...

This was a really good story but you did give a pretty obvious way to know what you plan to do to start the next chapter. It's alright when things ...

I normally try to do a review on everything I read, but without being sure I really can't do a good review. It might just be me, but somehow it ...

Really liked the story, it seemed like you plan to continue it. I look forward to any possible additions to the story. Out of curiosity do you plan to use ...

Well for a 6 to 10 year old story it seems long and really interesting. Either way still like it more so than the first chapter. Love that you make ...

I loved it so far. But figured I would mention how their was over 50 times you misspelled something, most of which in the first quarter or so of this ...

Loved this story but wanted to point out a couple misspellings you made, first was in this paragraph. “Ah! Forget it!” she whispered to herself. She turned fully to face ...

Was definitely interesting, though I have to agree with beans that it seems kind of rushed. I think it started decent but kind of went full sprint really early which ...

Loved this chapter even more, especially how you made silas able to materialize a sword in the real world. That was an awesome plot twist I hadn't expected. I don't ...

Loved this story. I don't think it qualified as a rock after it was given life, I think that would pretty much stop counting it as a rock. Loved the ...

I think it is paced fine. I'm actually disappointed I didn't use something like this already. Perfect start to a story about natural disasters or a scifi spin leading to ...

This was a really good story, you left off at a spot you could make another chapter from or do a several years later thing. But either way it was ...

As a fan of the original pokemon show and games I'm really looking forward to your series. Personally I think new pokemon games are crap. I haven't watched the show ...

I haven't read your first version but since this is a rewrite with more details I will follow this and wait on your next chapters. This seemed interesting start but ...

It was interesting I guess, not my cup of tea but interesting still. I agree with Rachelle's review though, you need more details. Not to sound mean, but it was ...