judi_patootie

This is deep but i think i get the meaning. I really liked it and keep writing. ~~*Judi Patootie*~~

You are very gifted and i don't have anything to critique because you are much better than i. Keep it up! (seriously) ~~*Judi Patootie*~~

love it! Great haiku humor. if im havin a bad hair day i just stick to some kind of headband. ~~*Judi Patootie*~~

I liked it... except it made me a little depressed because of the kind of mood. You're right the twist at the end does make the poem different from others. ...

thnx ill keep all that stuff in mind

I personally really liked reading this poem. The title fits it perfectly. And the way you describe it so a person sees pictures is great. Keep it up! Au Revoir ...

Brad, I loved this poem. I have no critiques because this is much better than anything I would be able to write at my age. But i really enjoyed reading ...

I don't think that the title really fits with what you write about in this poem and the last two lines just come out of nowhere... at least that's how ...

I think you're ending just leaves the reader hanging. You should have a way to cut it off and let the reader know that it is over. Otherwise the rest ...

I loved this poem... umm for your problem i would suggest not using so many words that relate to medicine use some more common known and it won't sound so ...

Thank you!

I agree w/ the purple balloon. I think it repeats too much and makes the reader lose interest. Use different sorts of words and the poem will be good. ~~Judi ...

Colleen pretty much sums up everything that i would have said... and i really did like the pictures i could see in my head.. well done on describing it! ~~*Judi*~~

I like the concept.. but i think you need to add more like one or two more stanzas to get the reader more interested. I agree with the people above ...

One little misfire. It may be a nuclear weapon, Or a few harmful words. A mistaken wrong move: It causes a world of difference. Chaos unravels. Disorder erupts. Nothing is ...