Misfire

Thank you!

There is potential here, but the way you list each individual line as a seperate idea deters from the flow. You must correlate your ideas so throughout the course of your poem we are guided along a specific topic. It shouldn't be up to the reader to unravel what you have written. Also, correcting spelling errors is not something that should be disregarded. Cheers,

Cameron

One little misfire.
It may be a nuclear weapon,
Or a few harmful words.
A mistaken wrong move:
It causes a world of difference.
Chaos unravels.
Disorder erupts.
Nothing is the same.
Earning back trust,
Piece by piece,
Slowly and carefully,
One thing after another,
Trying to restore the past.
Pretend nothing ever happened.
Put the pieces back together,
That got kicked all over,
And broke the puzzle.
Making it whole once again.
Baking the missing piece of pie,
Which was eaten out of hate.
Bring everyghing back together again.
Why use violence?
No more misfired bombs.
Stopping the hurtful words.
Quit the war and mistrust.
Solve with peace and understanding.
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Here's the punctuation!
and thanks for the critiques so far!

The fourth line "a mistaken wrong move" is stating things twice. Just tho0ght I'd point that out. Good idea; punctuate for more crits

I agree with piepie put correct punuaction in and I'll return.

First of all and add period, comas, things like that, then I will return