johnAsade

wow! wow! wow! I say, you didn't win that poetry competition for nothing. The poem itself is nice....I have always loved poems that try to rhyme at some point. Your ...

i had to leave a review.i have tour poems in the past, but his has been a first for me. Without trying so hard, the poem managed to reveal the ...

The first paragraph of this poem got me in the reading mood because it rhymed to some extent. And God knows i like rhyming poems! That is always the first ...

Nice! The way you practically envision and describe the girl without actually referring to her directly is just perfect! In fact i've learnt that trick from you. You manage to ...

Shouldn't 'I knew the day is near when you take the last your breath,' be 'I knew the day was near when you'd take your last breath'?'a couple of spelling ...

i couldnt quite make out “Anything is at it seems' until the final paragraph. Thats not a good thing-i mean, i was wondering what it was all about. Actually, i ...

For once, someone's poem rhymes! I have seen lots like this one, but none had the lines rhyming and keeping me attached to them. It does tell the sory well ...

must have been written quickly and in haste, and i must say it is pretty readable writing for a hash upload. The words didn't rhyme, which is not so bad,but ...

After reading that it was about apologizing to a mother, i crossed my fingers and waited to be touched by lines full of glorious words. Well, i can safely say ...

I like your phrasing, but i get confused somewhere...... " It's only for a short time I know But it feels like forever When I'm in the dark alone There ...

hi, there is something about the story that felt rushed to me. Either way, you got me wondering why the heroine was speaking in tongues. By keeping the idea that ...

hey acm, loved this short piece, but have a couple suggestions. In the second paragraph, the "someone neither will stand for" doesn't quite make sense to me. In the first ...

hello hyperview, i also find myself wanting to now what happened after you and jaime became friends after this. In other words, your story got me pulled in and interesting. ...