I still sight you walking in a white dress in my dreams…
I did everything to make you smile
I loved you until it was over.
I knew the day is near when you take the last your breath,
But please
Explain to me why black death
Is more important than your life?
Seize the day or die too slowly?
Trails in life, questions of us existing here are murdering tonight,
But no one cares.
I always was afraid of questions…
You gave me life, but will it least forever?
What if I stroke your beauty’s face nomore?
Mother, I presaged that I won’t see you anymore.
I sense my memories about you
They melt with time,
But today I’m too young to worry about failures of life.
The occasions you lost are empty and invisible without you here.
So please, don’t invite me from the paradise,
Because I’m living here.
The Edge of the Earth is my home
I promise, I will be stronger than you I will not sink like you did anymore.
Please do not think that I am indignant at you
I must determine to live not to die,
Because I still love you.
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This was amazing. I don't say that lightly because I don't like poetry usually. It was a little long for a poem though, so I almost stopped reading it but decided I enjoyed the start so much I should stick through to the end. But to be honest the last half wasnt as good as the first half and I almost felt like they were two differe
Shouldn't 'I knew the day is near when you take the last your breath,' be 'I knew the day was near when you'd take your last breath'?'a couple of spelling errors....'but will it least forever?' should be 'but will it last forever?'
Poem does tell a story, but not as well as it should. If there had been a rhyme, that would have been better. Either way, you need to spruce it up a little.Good work!