jls1638

This is a really good piece, it starts to transport the reader into each of these pieces and gives a different perspective. I like your descriptive choices that are all ...

I love this piece. One thing that I always tell people is that they need to add description but in this poem you have done an excellent job with description. ...

OK, I like where you go with this. I know when people think poetry they think rhyming but when you are writing sometimes it is more important to focus on ...

This is a deep poem. I like it. While it is about anxiety, I feel it also applies to depression and other issues that people go through. I feel that ...

I like this poem. It's what my sister likes to call stream of consciousness writing. You feel something so deeply that you have to get it on paper and when ...

This is a very powerful piece. I love that you made the reader feel what you were. I think that if you brought in the sadness, that I can imagine ...

I like the poem. I think that it is really good and is vague enough to allow interpretation by the reader which is a necessity when one is in poetry. ...

I like it. I think that you did a good job at explaining the definition and it makes the piece better as a whole. As always, impeccable description. I think ...

I really wish it was this easy for me to go to sleep. As for a review, I think the only thing I would add are maybe some more feeling ...

I like where you are going with this. I think that one thing that would benefit you is slowing down a little and paying attention to spelling. I noticed five ...

Ok, first of all, DAMN. That is a very interesting way to start a story. The first thing that I am going to comment is that you do a very ...

I like what you set up but it is quite confusing for a short story. This said I think that if you were to add a couple more chapters and ...

First, this chapter is very short. I would suggest making it longer and explain a little more the scarlet situation. I get the feeling I am starting a book in ...

I like this chapter, not only with more that is said on the quotes but with the background on the society. The knowledge that everyone develops a power and the ...

I think that you are getting the story line to flow very well. I am kind of curious as to what this secret mission is and what 'illness' he has ...