jessiethought

Superb imagery in this poem. Not only does your imagery present a vivid idea of place, but your imagery also gives meaning to the poem. Your choice of images gives ...

First off, very good poem. I don't mind your lack of punctuation and capitalization here. It fits the mood, I think: hazy memories, lazy hours, the days all blurring together ...

Excellent work! Lovely writing! And thank you, thank you, thank you for using correct grammar and writing well! Your writing was a pleasure to read, because, for the most part, ...

Wow--great idea! Very well done. This is an interesting view of Ada Lovelace! I really like your last paragraph. I do have a few suggestions, though. General style suggestions: Avoid ...

I definitely like your theme. Temptation isn't written about a lot. Your idea for this is great, and your descriptions really drive home the nature of the "malicious words." A ...

I'm definitely connecting with what you're describing in the poem--this is an experience common to pretty much every girl, I think! This idea could be made into a good short ...

I just found this poem, and I really, really liked it! (That's high praise; I only rarely "love" anything I read. I think modern culture absolutely "loves" too many things.) ...

This style really works. The simplicity and shortness of this poem is part of its draw. Your italicized refrain adds a lot to the poem. I don't know why; I ...

You present a very interesting idea of a story in these two paragraphs. I do have suggestions, though, to make this story better, if you want to. I'm mostly suggesting ...

This is an excellent short story, poignant and touching. I only have a few suggestions, mostly about how you could improve the flow of the writing and the flow of ...

This is excellent. No obvious, glaring red flags jump out at me from this piece--no horrific grammar, no awkward sentence constructions, nothing that I really have to complain about. Your ...

*the poem whispers softly* "What?" I ask. "Oh? Really?" The poem is asking me to tell you it wants to be made into a limerick. A limerick seems like the ...

I really enjoyed reading your poem. Your lack of punctuation fits the voice of the poem--understated, simple, direct--and so does your simple diction. (Simple as in short, direct, non-flowery words.) ...