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Hey, myjaspercat. This is a cool poem! It really surprised me when I began reading to find out the speaker of the poem was imagination itself--I really enjoyed that. My ...

Hey, I really liked your poem! :) I don't see any weird grammar or missing punctuation, so kudos to you! (Grammar and punctuation rules are always the obvious slip-ups that ...

Hey, this is a pretty cool poem. You described the girl really well, and I can relate super well. :) I do have a few suggestions for you, though. First ...

Wow. I really like your poetry, fortis. :) This poem is so cool... (Okay, okay--cool is a weak, non-descriptive word, but I just... this poem is COOL.) :D You have ...

Wow. Yeah. I'm kinda speechless. Because I know (somewhat) what depression feels like and... yeah. This is it. I really like this. You go. Awesome job. (So you are not ...

Wow! This is a pretty powerful poem. Definitely keep writing! I don't think I could write poetry this well when I was your age! I, like BookWolf, like this part: ...

The cards/house of cards metaphor is really great! I really like that! I often feel like this, too, like nobody really knows me and I'm putting up a false front, ...

I really like some of your phrasing here--pieces of this poem just catch my eye and pull me in. I especially like "whitewashed halls, unmarred walls/of middle-class conformity." As for ...

Hi again. One confusion I had as I was reading was the passage of time. I was startled and confused to find that a whole evening of dinner had passed ...

All righty, so I'm finally getting around to reviewing this chapter. (It's been a long month of school for me... sorry I haven't been reviewing.) Overall, Asenath is a very ...

Hey, this is cool. I like it. The story is short, but it's definitely got good stuff in it. And Ryu seems like a cool guy--I mean, he hasn't forgotten ...

Wow, this is really good. The poem begins sort of seriously and then... poof, you've surprised me with a humorous, relaxed side to the poem. My favorite stanza is the ...

Oooh. Another plot twist... the lovely maiden alone with her one companion... the handsome stranger rides up on a horse.... :D I have a couple of questions about what has ...

Woah, big turning point here! This is a huge reversal of the status quo... this chapter definitely upped the ante. (It seems like every one of your chapters grabs me ...

Wow! What a roller coaster of emotions and events! I totally agree with Wolfie36: "Somehow, it seems like you've grown as a writer through the chapters. Each one just gets ...