jessabelle4C

First of all-- Great Job! it's amazing! There were a few grammar mistakes, but then again we all make them. i like how you go through everything- the experiences. With ...

What I saw in eyes so empty. when soon I would be made full. Was a blessing, that I'd be destined to forsake. With every change in pace, I'd find ...

I like it. a lot! Of course, there's always the grammar mistakes EVERYONE makes :) I first have to say i enjoy how the character is so much different from ...

Amazing job once again!! i liked how you went into a back story of the truck, it made and supported the fact that Clyde was very "attached: to the car. ...

Please… an interesting word. It’s like begging, but not quite. It’s soft, and meek. It’s a request. It lets people know that you want something. I love this beginning. It ...

\ Jeremy Bless is the reason I believe in second chances. He taught me that I, Jayme Wilson, have my own perspective and my own will. Jeremy Bless is blind. ...

I like how you left a cliffhanger like this. Not knowing where my mom would sure freak me out! There was a few "i's" not getting upper cased. I thought ...

I thought The Lovely Bones was amazing. I liked how Sebold was able to make Susie seem like an angel to her brother and dad. The only thing I would ...

You take this ordinary girl Shy and alone sometimes You make it easy for her To step out into the world. Though its dark at times Thats why I have ...

I hate Penelope and Carolina. But Dianna and Henry seem so cute together. :smt057 Can't wait to read Splendor! :smt081

I really didn't get it. I think it's mostly because this really isn't my writing style, but I agree with the others, you just placed her there. I know that ...

Holy Crackers! Man, dude. You work that typing and writin' skills! You seriously do put us all to shame! STOP WRITING! :lol: Tell me whenever you decide to post again, ...

Towards the whiteboard, the fallen desks. Towards me. I think it should be Towards the whiteboard. Towards the fallen desks. Towards me. But just how I write. Ending it pressing ...

Grudges Misconcepting, hateful judging, Friend I smile to your face, Stab you in your sleep, Bleed your tears till you dry, All the whole while I fake smile. Laugh, as ...

A mother’s grief; how she lost her child A child’s playground; swimming all day A training ground for athletes; swimming every day A pool of ideas; excellent for creative minds ...