jenni321

so sorry if it seemed a bit strange; I probably should have explained the style. I'm experimenting with a form called prose poetry, which is exactly how it sounds: incorporating ...

oh my god I posted this in 2007. The current English major in me is hiding in shame. Dear lord I swear I've grown up.

I really appreciated your imagery here; no abstractions, concrete and tangible images. nice. I'm just wondering if the rhyme scheme here is working for you. It's very irregular and kinda ...

Hello! Nice work, I can tell this subject means a lot to you. A few suggestions: You have some rhymes sneaking in in the 2nd and last stanza and that ...

This is really great. It can be hard to keep the energy up for a long poem like this, but your style was consistent throughout. You have an excellent, wide-reaching ...

Very nice, I like it. Powerful, Emotional, I could feel 'choking' at the end. The holocaust is always a hard topic to write about, it's hard to capture something so ...

Wow, thanks guys! I only had about 10 minutes to write this, so I guess I should give myself a time limit more often! And yeah, I'm always forgetting that ...

uh, thanks..I guess. haha, that's an interesting comment...

Yeah, you know, after I reread it a few dozen times, I get what you need. I was letting off some steam...Thanks for being honest though! This will go in ...

Huh? Harry Potter? What's that...?

This book was life changing. It seriously changed the way I think. Yeah, at first it was hard to understand, but once I got into it, I couldn't put it ...

It's teetering on the edge of sloppy! careful! interesting topic, i've never been one for politics. maybe u should edit it more!

I agree, it sounds kind of preteenish. u're aiming for adult! unless, u really are aiming for kids. JEnni

I really liked the imagery, love the use of metaphors and such. hmm, well, i have no critiscm! great job! JEnni

I thought it was good, but I agree that there could have been more imagery. some words or phrases (brown hair, etc.) could have used more descriptive words instead. Otherwise, ...