I forgot how long ago i wrote this, i was probably 9 or so:
Me.
I don't even know what
Bt means anymore.
'Me' is lost
Influenced by family,
Friends, teachers,
Boys.
They make 'Me' be 'Them'
They think,
That when it comes to people,
One size fits all.
Once personallity fits all.
That shouldn't be true.
i don't want to be 'them'
I just want to be
Me.
I probably have some comma errors, or errors of the sort. If found this in the bottom of my drawer, and i think it might have some form of potential. So, fire away!
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Jeez. You were a deep 9 year old. Then again, I was too.
Hello jenni321! I always find old poems I've written; its like a snapshot into the past!
I love the statement at the beginning. I love beginnings like this because they can go in so many directions.
This really is a good poem. It has the choppy feeling of defiance woven into it with the short lines. With a few touch ups, it would be perfect!
Good job and keep writing!
yubbies21
oh my god I posted this in 2007. The current English major in me is hiding in shame. Dear lord I swear I've grown up.
Sorry, you asked me to be brutal ... I didn't really like it.
what about going into detail? Just saying that you didn't like it is NOT enough!